Friday, March 28th, 2014 07:34 pm
Princess Peach gazed out across the landscape, her keen eyesight picking out Mario's progress through the mazes that, taken altogether in their many levels, comprised her father's kingdom.

Gold coins sparkled as Mario collected them, and the red flashes of moving mushrooms or green slides of skittering tortoise shells indicated his path as he approached another goal.

Even from her distant perch in the highest tower of the home she'd been raised in, she could see the speech bubble that emerged at the entrance to that worthless pile of rocks, one of countless decoys scattered throughout her father's domain. "Sorry, Mario, our princess is in another castle!"

Peach snorted in disgust as she finished packing her camping backpack, and pulled the last of her camouflage gear over her head.

Unrolling the rope ladder that would take her down the far side of the tower, away from the guards and toward the misty hills that meant freedom, she strapped the pack more securely on her back and muttered,

"To hell with being a prize at the end of someone else's adventures!"

She swung her leg over the windowsill and was gone.




This has been my Week Three entry for [livejournal.com profile] therealljidol, and the prompt was "In Another Castle".

Beta-readings done by [livejournal.com profile] wrenb, and [livejournal.com profile] chipchat !

Please go read and enjoy my colleagues' entries here. To vote for my entry, link will be *here* once it's posted.

Thank you for reading!
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Saturday, March 29th, 2014 04:30 am (UTC)
Oh, nice and succinctly done! I like this a lot.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 06:13 am (UTC)
Thank you very much! I wanted to challenge myself to write *short* and to write fiction this time.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 11:38 am (UTC)
Hahaha, I like the twist at the end! Nice!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 05:57 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I enjoyed writing this.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 12:27 pm (UTC)
I like this.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 06:01 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much for saying so! I struggled momentarily between doing this kind of self-saving Peach, doing a prompt based on my life, or doing a kind of formal essay about alternative ways to be a feminist princess.

I think this was a solid choice.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 01:33 pm (UTC)
Lovely!! Way to go Peach !! Good work!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 05:59 pm (UTC)
*grin* thanks!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 02:17 pm (UTC)
Ha! Take that, Mario!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 05:58 pm (UTC)
Hee hee hee, I know, right?
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 04:11 pm (UTC)
Heh this brings back memories. Nice twist there!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 05:58 pm (UTC)
Yay, and thank you!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 05:51 pm (UTC)
If LJ had a "like" button like Facebook, it would totally be getting clicked right now. Bravo, Princess Peach!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 05:58 pm (UTC)
Thank you! This was such fun to craft.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 06:11 pm (UTC)
Brilliant!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 06:55 pm (UTC)
*bows*

well, thank you!!

*grin*
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 07:02 pm (UTC)
Good for Princess Peach. Don't wait to be saved save yourself. Well done.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 07:04 pm (UTC)
Thank you.

I maaaay have read too many fractured fairy tales in my 20's.

*grin*
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 08:08 pm (UTC)
Excellent way to flip Peach around! :)
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 08:29 pm (UTC)
Thanks, dear!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 08:10 pm (UTC)
Nice!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 08:30 pm (UTC)
Thanks, babe!
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 09:57 pm (UTC)
I like the opposing POV. Well done.
Saturday, March 29th, 2014 10:10 pm (UTC)
thank you very much!
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 12:21 am (UTC)
I love it! I played the heck out of Mario 2 (the dokidoki panic rip-off) where Peach used her skirt to float around, and that's pretty much what I'm picturing her doing after deciding she can be her own hero.
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 12:37 am (UTC)
Thanks! Mostly I have vicariously played video games, but Mario is hard to forget, eh?

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Sunday, March 30th, 2014 12:58 am (UTC)
Yes! I love it! We are not a prize to wait and be won!

Great job. I really love this entry!
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 01:09 am (UTC)
Aw, yay! Thanks very much! <3
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 07:31 am (UTC)
OMG AWESOME! :)
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 04:27 pm (UTC)
*grin* thanks so much!
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 10:56 am (UTC)
Oh, yes! YES! I love this entry.

"To hell with being a prize at the end of someone else's adventures!"

SLOW CLAP, BECAUSE THIS. SO MUCH.
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 08:21 pm (UTC)
I may have read some Feminist Fairy Tales back in the day. :)
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 08:53 pm (UTC)
Awesome! A princess who doesn't simper and wait to be rescued. I enjoyed this.
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 09:22 pm (UTC)
Oh good. Thanks so much!
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 10:31 pm (UTC)
Cute.
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 11:03 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
Sunday, March 30th, 2014 11:40 pm (UTC)
Best.Mario.Story.Ever.
Monday, March 31st, 2014 12:33 am (UTC)
Tats, you actually made me gasp at this. Thanks SO much!

Eeeee!!<3!
Monday, March 31st, 2014 04:31 am (UTC)
Wonderful! I love it from Peach's perspective instead of Mario's or a gamer's perspective, and I like the style it's written in as well, succinct without being sparse.
Monday, March 31st, 2014 05:00 am (UTC)
Mmmm. I'm just going to wrap myself up in these words and go on to bed.

Now I feel all cozy. Thank you!
Monday, March 31st, 2014 01:17 pm (UTC)
Short, sharp, and a great ending. :)
Monday, March 31st, 2014 03:55 pm (UTC)
*grin*

Thanks so very much!
Monday, March 31st, 2014 05:42 pm (UTC)
"To hell with being a prize at the end of someone else's adventures!"

What a thoroughly awesome line and and adventure!

Talk about changing the game...
Monday, March 31st, 2014 06:50 pm (UTC)
*grin* that was the idea!

I may have to pick the brains of friends who play this game, I kind of love the idea of continuing to turn this paradigm upside down.

"Continuing adventures of Princess Peach, Badass Vagabond" sounds pretty good to me...

Did you hear about the gamer dad who hacked Mario so his daughter could play Peach through the game, and go rescue Mario? I love that guy.

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Tuesday, April 1st, 2014 12:15 am (UTC)
A+ post!
Tuesday, April 1st, 2014 01:55 am (UTC)
*grinning*

Thank you!!
Tuesday, April 1st, 2014 01:41 am (UTC)
I always thought the Princess was much more badass than the game let on. :)
Tuesday, April 1st, 2014 03:02 am (UTC)
woot!
Tuesday, April 1st, 2014 04:58 am (UTC)
Thank you!
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